uninvited blues waltz
back into my life!
the meadows of my cheeks
glazed with rain,
for both the eyes
conspired to flood!
the blues don't have a
name, face or purpose-
blues for blues sake,
i suppose!
soon pretentious morning
will be here,
we will wear
our smiles on again
like we do every day!
last night will be a-
secret between
the tear flavoured pillow
and my non- existent sandman.
love,
aditi
( more late night poetry, i know its crap why the hell did i post it?)
Wednesday, September 5, 2007
UNINVITED BLUES.
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last night will be a-
secret between
the tear flavoured pillow
and my non- existent sandman.
I absolutely loved those lines... especially the 'tear flavoured pillow' :) keep those poems coming...!
@ shmoo
thanks for your encouragement!!!
Aditi that's a good one. yeps, u managed to portray something that has been done over and over again in a totally new light, a new perspective.
it flows, the imagery flows, it sounds new and fresh even if we are all familiar with it.
i think u should keep it as a piece of prose though. it wud sound much better for it would just flow. or mebbe couple up each two lines into one or something like that, u get what i mean? thik that would work much better.
it cud work as prose too...
thnks 4 ur suggestion...
btw kama whr is ur update... we r waitin!!!!
Great, i love the expression
reminds me of first 2 lines of the song.. naked... by avril..
been forever since I've heard any avril... which album is this from?
I wake up in the morning
Put on my face
The one that's gonna get me
Through another day
Doesn't really matter
How I feel inside
This life is like a game sometimes
www.youtube.com/watch?v=XYgI6XEAfFs
Thats the youtube link..
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